Hello, please, feedback! Thank you!

Kindly provide your feedback on my entry work, thanks

Hello Project Owner,
Thank you for inviting me with your project.
I've submitted some design proposals for your logo design according to your brief.
Please review my design and let me know if I am on right track and If you're looking for different designs, please let me know if you need any changes. If you don't like the design simply eliminate it, but don't rate it with 1, 2, 3 star.
Possible comment on my design would be much appreciated.
Thanks & regards,
Slant Line Media

Hello Project Holder, about the entry (#21703304), do you want me to do some changes? what did you like about it, and what would you like to change?