Feedback please

Hi!, when you have time for some feedback , please ?

sir please check my design #20397470 and #20397471 ..#20397472

Hello Project Owner,
I've submitted some design proposals for your logo design according to your brief.
Please review my design and let me know if I am on right track and If you're looking for different designs, please let me know if you need any changes.
Possible comment on my design would be much appreciated.
Thanks & regards,
Slant Line Media

Please can you leave me some good feedback. Thank You

feedback on entry #20445518