Feedback please.

read this again:
If this is not at all the direction you were looking for, just eliminate this design.
Please avoid leaving star ratings, lower than 4, in this case as star ratings
are about designers, and finished designs rather than drafts and suggestions.

don't spoil the rating of designers, they spend their time to make your logo

Hello sir revised design submitted i am ready to send all original files.

Hello sir revised design submitted i am ready to send all original files

Hello sir feedback please.